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I place my toe in the water. A golden ripple grows across the glowing surface of the lake. The lake doesn’t normally attract much attention. It’s set behind a forest and usually ignored or forgotten. There are a few people that know it’s beauty but this evening they’ve chosen to stay in.
Misty and I strip down. I run and jump off a rock into the lake. I let the cold water consume my naked body and chill it like a thousand stabbing knives. I emerge from the water. The dry, summer air attacks me full force. Nature, however, decides it wants to be nice. The chill of the water balances the heat of the air and I feel no effect from either.
Water splashes in my eyes as Misty jumps in. Goosebumps run up my body as the water rises to my shoulders. Misty surfaces in front of me. The setting sun compliments the profile of her naked figure.
“The water feels so nice,” she says lazily as she falls back onto the water and allows herself to float.
“Yeah, I’m glad you invited me to come skinny dipping,” I say treading water.
“It’s not skinny dipping. It’s being at one with nature.” She laughs. It’s a soft, pleasant sound that goes nicely with the setting sun. “See Kissy? Adam and Eve were created naked. Animals, a part from pampered lap dogs, don’t were clothing. That’s all we are Kissy, animals in clothing. But right now we’re in our natural state. Everything is the way it should be.”
©2007-2009 ~that-damn-emu-kid
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Author's Comments

I'm not really all that sure where I wanted to go with this story. First it was a love story between the two, then it wasn't. Now I don't know what it is. I was bored and I wanted to write so I wrote this..... Opinions are greatly appreciated.

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:iconhugmuffin666:
I had some trouble seeing where you were going with this at first too; the temperature description was kinda distracting at first. But I like the ending dialogue, and how it ties in with the title.

I also really liked how you made Misty completely at ease with nature, and that it complements her. I could actually visualize the scene and in the back of my mind I could almost hear her laughter, which was pretty cool.

I can't tell, though, if Kissy is envious or admiring of her friend. Judging from the flattering descriptions, I'd say admiring, but I'm not exactly sure. Not that it detracts from the story; I just thought I'd mention it.

You could easily leave this as it is, make a series of one-shots based on it, or branch out into a story, with nature as a recurring dominant theme...or whatever you want. You're talented, whatever you do with it will be good. :) Overall I liked it. It was very calming except for the 'thousand stabbing knives' part.

XDD

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wonderful!!

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That is all.
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I love you're comments. They're so full of commenty goodness. :pc: :eyepopping: You definatly help me.

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it's beauty --> its beauty

I really love this, I like the way you think, and how you transformed such a thought into a text.

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Thank you.

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:iconhugmuffin666:
Thank you^_^
I'm glad to help whenever I can.

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